Tuesday 18 March 2014

Camp witting




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Feedback: I like the way you have used expert ion in your writing
Feed forward: I think you could make the reader want to read more by adding some metaphors and some personification.

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  1. Ebony Maaka7 April 2014 at 17:31

    I love how you used short sentences and describing words to help build tension and suspense. it was really scary in the burma trail and your story helps the reader feel that. I can't wait to see your story published on your blog. I wonder what you might need to think of to get your writing to this stage?

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